My essay week 1

Submitted by guest (not verified) on 11 November 2012 - 2:25pm

I am sorry that my essay is late but here it is.

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the question was, " Pop music and dance on display in theCaribbean today are corrupting the youth and making them irresponsible".Write an essay giving your views on this statement.

My answer.

Pop music in the Caribbean today generally carries messages that crime, violence and easy sex are good and desirable. Pop music contains a lot of profanity and curse words which encourage young people to use curse words. Pop music also glorifies violence against women, homosexuals and other people. It also glorifies crime and criminal activity by making criminals out to be heroes in their songs. When they focus on sex, pop music encourages both men and women to view each other as sex objects.

The messages in pop music that easy sex is good are reinforced by the types of dances that are popular with the youth. These dances all tend to highlight the sex act in some way. In fact, in many of the dances, all the dancers are doing is pretending that they are engaging in some kind of sex act. This focus on sex and sex acts, violence, crime and profanity is having a negative effect on the youth of the region. The pop music corrupts them by encouraging them to use profanity as a way of communicating, to view violence and crime as acceptable social activities and therefore encourages them to do it. In addition, pop music and dance corrupts the youth by encouraging them to see sex as a normal recreational activity which has no consequences. Popular dance also encourages them to engage in pretend sex acts in public, which they call dancing.

The result of this is the corruption of the youth in the Caribbean. The youth do not see anything wrong with their behavior and they do not accept any responsibility for any negative consequences of their actions. As far as the youth are concerned, they are simply living their lives and they cannot be held responsible if it results in any negative outcomes.

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Kathy-ann Daniel 11 November 2012 - 4:29pm

Hello tburn,

This is an excellent persuasive essay. You have a lot for good points about the way pop music and dance influences Caribbean youth. I like the way you have identified, sex, violence, crime and profanity as the major issues and tried to show how with each one that music promotes it and influences the youth.

Really good essay, I would give this a grade 2.

I encourage you to try writing some more essays.

june joseph 11 November 2012 - 10:19pm

Hi tburn,

I really love your essay. I like the way you pinpointed the actual irresponsible behaviors that can be linked with pop music and dance. I don't know if this was your first essay, but it was absolutely fabulous. Keep on keeping on.!

Looking forward to seeing more.

CJJ

tburn (not verified) 12 November 2012 - 7:38pm

In reply to by june joseph

Thanks a lot. I worked hard on it. I know it didn't even make 400 words but....at least I tried... right?

You are boss when it comes to writing essay doh! I read your essays and I get a lot of ideas. I gonna try to write another one this week.

Giad (not verified) 13 November 2012 - 8:50pm

you covered all the problems that pop music and dance cause. and you show how badly they affect the youth. you did a really good job.

Congrats!

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